Improvements...


Get rid of Dorthy- A...nnoying! She doesn't even fit w/ Edgar.
Gretchen (actress) needs to 'act.' She just kind slumps and walks. She used to be so cool.
Jimmy has no passion but books. He will be as stale as those pages the mice chewed.
Give Edgar and Lindsey some more time, together or not, they are funny!
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Kind of slumps and walks? She was "acting." Her character was clinically depressed.

"I thought about what you said to me the other day, about my painting..."

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Kill off Lindsay's fat hateful ass. She is malicious and insanely annoying.

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